I have a tentative thesis i hope that this will work. we shall see...
here is my new thesis:
Children with chronic or sever pain should have options to decrease their pain by not just medicine but by distractions such as music and movies, relaxation techniques, and virtual reality and video games.
I think you are now on the right track- next step is to give the same information without the negatives- say it in the positive- without "not". Good job!
ReplyDeleteGetting closer to a thesis - but I'm concerned that I've not heard about any specific contact with the Children's Shelter yet...? The thesis has promise - I agree with the removal of the negatives. You may even be able to say more clearly that "Children with chronic or severe pain do better in the short term when they have alternative options to decrease their pain..." I'm not sure if there is enough information for that, but it might be a good possibility depending on your sources. Keep it up! Dr. B
ReplyDeleteAnna my concern with utilizing the Children's Shelter for the project you describe is that you may find more "emotional" pain than "physical" pain with the children.
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